Hey readers!
This week, I worked on my Methods Proposal. For my blog post, we were given the task of making an elevator pitch!
Here is the video from YouTube. Hope you enjoy!
Let's have another great week of research!
Cheers,
YP
Yash -- the beginning part was so disturbing, that I'm not sure I heard a word after you tried to rap. Just kidding -- but once I saw the blood, I threw up and passed out. Kidding again.
ReplyDeleteAnyway, I think that you did a strong job articulating the significance of your research and the context for your research. I also think that you did a good job explaining that we're looking for ideal sample preparation, but I don't think that you emphasized finding the most economic solution is part of the optimal preparation, as that would make it feasible to be applied across the medical field.
Also, while your intonations were strong, I think that you reading was way too obvious and you looked down way too often. You need to work on engaging with your audience through eye contact.
Hi Yash,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a good job connecting people who need blood testing for their diseases to people who don't through symptoms that all humans feel for a variety of reasons. I think even though this is an innovative blood testing method for specific people who need it, you managed to connect it to the general public if that makes sense. Even you showing how it worked on yourself, the researcher, was fascinating to watch (or too graphic as you said for people who don't like blood). It just made the device less scary and proved it was painless in video form. You also phrased everything in simple terms even I could understand!!!
The only thing I think you could improve on is reading off the screen, which was pretty obvious because you were so close to the screen. But, like Mrs. Haag said, your dialogue and your voice made the video entertaining (lol puns!! "your funding will be the blood that nourishes our research, I hope you will be able to drop some of it on my project" "vile vials"). If you memorize your script that could ultimately help and would make the delivery really strong.
I would love to be the blood that nourishes your research!!.. that sounds weird.
Sunskruthi
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Haha Sunskruthi's last line of her comment. Also, RIP Ashwath's comment grade.
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ReplyDeleteHi Yash,
Honestly I thought I was in for a terrible experience when I first started the video and heard that Snoop Dogg parody, but I was surprised when I got a decently explained fund worthy pitch. There was a good explanation of statistics that a gave a background to the information, revealing a need to stop anemia and create a more accurate method. There were a bit too many technical terms, but your explication was decent enough to understand the concepts. The puns were a bit forced, but you do you.
On the presentation side, I like the finger pricking. It showed the simplicity of your sampling process. Also the finger counting was helpful in terms of visualizing the amount of steps remaining. It also helped you pace the speech. Sometimes you talked a bit fast, but nothing Akash like.
Overall, it was a great presentation.
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Ashwath V.